EQUAL-OPPORTUNITY ANNOYANCE (telophase) wrote,
EQUAL-OPPORTUNITY ANNOYANCE
telophase

Why I Am Not Buying Your Book

From the excerpt:

1. The bad guy in the excerpt is named Shadye. Shadye. He's also a monologuer. But Shadye.

2. The main character is ripped from our world into a fantasy world because they think she is a Child of Destiny. Her mother's name is Destiny. I would find a case of mistaken identity amusing and worth reading on for the meta-commentary, but as far as I can tell from other clues in the excerpt, we're meant to take the Child of Destiny stuff seriously instead of getting meta.

3. Her rescuer says "Take my hand if you want to live...Come with me or die!" I've seen too many things in the Terminator franchise to accept that it's anything but a reworded reference to "Come with me if you want to live", and it throws me out.

4. The rescuer's name is Void. Void. He's also a monologuer.

edit to add this point, because I forgot 4.5 It needs a good editor. Witness this selection:
Somehow, she knew that the dragon was old. The magic field surrounding the creature bombarded her with impressions and sensations, piling them into her mind. It was old enough to have seen eons pass while it drifted through the skies, heedless of the scurrying humans on the world below.
Allow me to edit that for you. Ahem.
Somehow, she knew that the dragon was old. The magic field surrounding the creature bombarded her with impressions and sensations, piling them into her mind. It was old enough to have seen eons pass while it drifted through the skies, heedless of the scurrying humans on the world below.


5. But really, you lost me at Shadye.

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